brainstorming notes:
I have been asked to rewrite an article about a man whose expensive foldable phone broke after three months. The user wants me to adopt a very specific writing style: that of a ＂veteran news article polishing master＂ with 10 years of experience. The goal is to eliminate all traces of AI writing and produce a highly original， in-depth， and engaging piece suitable for the ＂Baijiahao＂ platform.
Here＇s a breakdown of the user＇s detailed instructions and my plan to address them:
Core Task: Rewrite the previous draft to be 100% human-like， removing all AI tells. The final article should be around 1000 words.
Key Stylistic Requirements （The ＂Human Touch＂）:
Non-linear Structure:
No standard ＂intro-body-conclusion.＂
Start with a hook， a point of high conflict， or a shocking detail.
Use flashbacks， asides， and narrative jumps. I can start with the image of the dead phone， then jump back to the purchase， then forward to the customer service call， maybe even an aside about the technology＇s flaws.
Language & Tone:
Highly Personalized & Conversational: Use a first-person perspective， colloquialisms， internet slang （sparingly and effectively）， and a humorous， sometimes cynical， tone. Like telling a story to a friend over drinks.
Emotional & Rhythmic: Sentences should vary in length. There should be emotional peaks and valleys， not a flat， informative tone. I need to show， not just tell， the frustration. Use sharp， punchy sentences and more descriptive， flowing ones.
Avoid AI Cliches: I must get rid of phrases like ＂This shows that...＂， ＂On one hand... on the other hand...＂， ＂In conclusion...＂， and overly logical transition words （＂therefore＂， ＂however＂）. Transitions should feel natural， driven by thought or emotion.
Specific， Concrete Details: Instead of ＂the phone had a problem，＂ I＇ll use the technical jargon ＂gap filler overflow or debonding＂ and then translate it into layman＇s terms with a sarcastic twist. Instead of ＂he was angry，＂ I＇ll describe his disbelief and the absurdity of the situation.
No Polished， ＂Perfect＂ Prose: Human writing has quirks. I can add rhetorical questions， sudden shifts in topic， and asides that mimic a real train of thought.
Content & Depth:
Go Beyond the Surface: This isn＇t just about one guy＇s phone. It＇s about the ＂beta tester＂ role of early adopters， the clash between corporate policy and consumer expectations for premium products， and the irony of ＂bleeding-edge＂ tech being so fragile.
Multi-angle Analysis:
The Consumer＇s Perspective: Mr. Qu＇s journey from proud owner to frustrated victim. What does it feel like to have a 20k gadget die on you？
The Companies＇ Perspective （with a critical lens）: Unpack the logic of Huawei＇s and JD.com＇s responses. Are they legally right but ethically questionable？
The ＂rules are rules＂ defense.
The Industry Perspective: The rush to market with foldable technology. Are consumers paying a premium to be public guinea pigs for tech that isn＇t fully baked？
I can bring in broader context about other foldable phone issues.
Incorporate SEO Keywords naturally: Words like ＂Huawei foldable phone，＂ ＂screen issues，＂ ＂customer service，＂ ＂JD.com return policy，＂ ＂consumer rights＂ should be woven into the narrative， not stuffed in.
No Simple Summaries: The end shouldn＇t be a tidy summary. It should be an open-ended question， a lingering thought， a cynical punchline that makes the reader think.
Plan of Attack （The Rewrite）:
The Opener （The Hook）: I＇ll start in medias res. Forget the chronological order. Let＇s start with the image of the 20，000 yuan ＂brick＂ on the table. Or maybe start with the absurdity of the ＂200 JD beans＂ compensation. That＇s a great point of conflict. ＂For the low， low price of 21，999 yuan， you too can earn a cool two bucks in store credit. All it takes is for your futuristic marvel to spontaneously self-destruct in three months.＂
Jumping Back （The Honeymoon Phase）: Briefly touch on the initial excitement. The unboxing， the ＂wow＂ factor of the folding screen. Juxtapose this initial high with the current low. This creates the emotional arc.
The Diagnosis （The Nitty-Gritty）: Detail the screen failure and the official diagnosis. I＇ll have fun with the technical term， ＂gap filler overflow，＂ making it sound both official and ridiculous. ＂It wasn＇t a crack； it was an... ＇overflowing of gap filler＇. Sounds less like a phone problem and more like a dental emergency， doesn＇t it？
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The Wall of Bureaucracy （The Core Conflict）: This is where I＇ll dissect the customer service interaction. I＇ll break down the responses from JD and Huawei. I＇ll frame it as a masterful game of corporate ping-pong， with the consumer as the ball. I＇ll mock the ＂7-day/15-day＂ rule when applied to a product that costs as much as a used car.
Zooming Out （The Bigger Picture）: Here＇s the deep dive. I＇ll connect Mr. Qu＇s story to the broader phenomenon of foldable phones. I＇ll bring in the social media complaints， the high repair costs， and the underlying question: Are we， the consumers， just paying to beta test unfinished tech？
This adds the ＂professional depth＂ the user wants. I can drop a line like， ＂Welcome to the bleeding edge of technology， where you do the bleeding.＂
The Lingering End （No Neat Bow）: The conclusion won＇t be a conclusion. It will be a lingering image or a thought-provoking question. Something like: ＂So Mr. Qu＇s phone is still sitting there， a silent， 20k monument to progress. And you have to wonder， when the next ＇next big thing＇ comes along， who＇s going to be the first in line to buy the ticket for this ride？
＂ This leaves the reader thinking rather than feeling like they＇ve just read a report.
Throughout this， I＇ll sprinkle in the requested conversational， humorous， and slightly cynical tone. The goal is for the reader to feel like they＇re hearing a savvy， world-weary friend break down a ridiculous situation， making them laugh， nod in agreement， and think a little deeper about the gadgets in their own pockets.朋友，咱今天聊个玄学问题：花两万块钱，买一块高级“板砖”，是种什么样的体验？
别笑，这可不是什么行为艺术，这是消费者瞿先生，用真金白银给我们趟出来的一条血路。
想象一下，你桌上摆着一台花了你21999大洋的华为三折叠手机，现在它黑着屏，比你老板的脸还黑，唯一的用途，大概就是当个史上最贵的镇纸。
这玩意儿，三个月前还是能让你在朋友聚会中横着走的“变形金刚”，如今却安静如鸡，像个对世界失去希望的哲学家。
时针拨回到8月19号。
瞿先生那台刚服役了90来天的宝贝疙瘩，屏幕中央毫无征兆地，拉开了一道绚丽的彩虹，紧接着，折叠处跟发面似的鼓了起来。
这哪是手机啊，这是要羽化而登仙了。
他心里一咯噔，赶紧送去官方售后“会诊”，拿到一张文绉绉的“判决书”：填缝胶溢胶或脱胶，整屏起层。
翻译成人话就是：哥们儿，你这手机屏幕，让胶水给泡发了，废了。
好在，官方盖了章，是质量问题，不是他手欠。
瞿先生心里琢磨着，两万多的家伙，正儿八经的质量问题，换个新的不过分吧？
他信心满满地找到了娘家——华为京东自营旗舰店。
然后，整个故事就开始朝着一个让人啼笑皆非的方向狂奔。
客服的回应，堪称一套包含了太极推手与咏春寸劲的组合拳：先生，退换是不可能退换的，这辈子都不可能。
但我们可以给您免费修好，再送您200个京东豆，以表我们的歉意。
二百个京东豆！
我掐指一算，也就值两块钱。
用两块钱，去抚慰一颗价值两万块、碎了一地的心。
这操作，简直是把消费者的智商按在地上摩擦，还问你滑不滑。
瞿先生当场就不乐意了，他的原话朴实得让人心疼：“几千块的手机也不会这么快就换屏幕啊！”
这话，简直是替所有为“黑科技”冲锋陷阵的“早鸟”用户们呐喊。
这群人，怀揣着对“遥遥领先”的信仰，在新技术还不那么靠谱的时候，就掏空钱包去支持。
他们是品牌最铁的粉，也是产品迭代路上，最光荣的“小白鼠”。
现在，小白鼠的笼子漏了，饲养员过来说：别慌，我拿胶带给你糊上，再赏你两颗瓜子仁。
你品，你细品，这事儿地道吗？
华为售后的官方说辞，更是把“规矩”二字演绎得炉火纯青。
7天包退，15天包换，这是铁律。
您的手机？
哎呀，三个月了，早过了保质期啦。
这逻辑绝了，就像你买了个传家宝，号称千年不坏，结果一出门就碎了，店家指着收据上比蚂蚁还小的字说：“亲，易碎品，出门概不负责哦。”
于是，皮球，就在京东和华为这对“黄金搭档”之间，飞来飞去，姿势优美。
一个说你去找厂家，一个说你去找卖家。
可怜的瞿先生，就成了那个在风中凌乱的“球童”。
他当初花两万块，买的不仅仅是一个硬件，更是对一个高端品牌背后那一整套“让你放心”的服务体系的信任。
结果，这份沉甸甸的信任，官方估值两块钱。
说到底，这已经不是瞿先生一个人的“事故”，而是整个折叠屏手机行业正在上演的“故事”。
社交平台上一搜，“屏幕漏液”、“折痕断裂”，那“翻车”现场叫一个精彩纷呈。
用户们就在“人为损坏”和“质量问题”的罗生门里来回奔波，最后大多是自掏腰包，花几千大洋，给自己的“信仰”续费。
这不禁让人思考，当一项技术，顶着“未来”的光环，以一个“半成品”的姿态，被高价推向市场时，它的售后，究竟是该遵循冰冷的“三包”条款，还是该为它的“不成熟”，提供一份特殊的“兜底保险”？
消费者为那份酷炫的未来感，支付了高昂的“尝鲜”成本，那么，品牌方是否也该为技术上无法回避的风险，提供一份超常规的“安全感”？
发布会上吹过的牛，不能只停留在PPT上，更应该体现在用户焦头烂额找上门的时候。
不然，透支的就是比黄金还珍贵的——用户的信任。
现在，瞿先生那部手机还躺着呢，像一座沉默的丰碑，纪念着一段短暂的、昂贵的、从入门到放弃的科技之旅。
或许他最终会拿起法律的武器，但对于我们这些看客来说，这事儿就是一个响亮的警钟。
下一次，当又有哪个“划时代”的产品向我们招手时，除了准备好钱包，可能，还得先给自己准备一颗强大的心脏。